Comments on: Does this sound good for a novel? http://www.topunderwatercamera.com/does-this-sound-good-for-a-novel.html Best Underwater Camera Information Guide Sun, 01 Nov 2009 10:00:11 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 By: Melvin http://www.topunderwatercamera.com/does-this-sound-good-for-a-novel.html/comment-page-1#comment-162 Melvin Sat, 22 Aug 2009 05:26:24 +0000 http://topunderwatercamera.com/does-this-sound-good-for-a-novel.html#comment-162 well, for me it's good. but try to add some history about the eel. the eel should be a different one.or why dont you try a deep sea creature. i thought there was a deep sea marine creatures that has an electric capabilities. just look on google on these creatures just search deep sea creatures electric shock. for me, it will give mystery to your novel on a different way. its good to use eel but try a different one, deep sea creatures, they are mysterious and never told to any novel(i thought) aside from sharks. -just a suggestion but it's up to you--- luke was monitoring the sea until he discovers a different marine creature(a deep sea creature that was lost and found on the shallow sea), though usually deep sea guys dont found in shallow seas, but this one was found by luke, and then he gets bitten by that and blah blah... --(you may not use this cause deep sea creatures are like monsters but i thought there some that look good and beautiful) --you may check this site: ---but i guess your eel is ok. -- good luck well, for me it’s good. but try to add some history about the eel. the eel should be a different one.or why dont you try a deep sea creature. i thought there was a deep sea marine creatures that has an electric capabilities. just look on google on these creatures just search deep sea creatures electric shock. for me, it will give mystery to your novel on a different way. its good to use eel but try a different one, deep sea creatures, they are mysterious and never told to any novel(i thought) aside from sharks.
-just a suggestion but it’s up to you— luke was monitoring the sea until he discovers a different marine creature(a deep sea creature that was lost and found on the shallow sea), though usually deep sea guys dont found in shallow seas, but this one was found by luke, and then he gets bitten by that and blah blah…
–(you may not use this cause deep sea creatures are like monsters but i thought there some that look good and beautiful)

–you may check this site:

—but i guess your eel is ok.
– good luck

]]> By: Lana T. http://www.topunderwatercamera.com/does-this-sound-good-for-a-novel.html/comment-page-1#comment-161 Lana T. Thu, 20 Aug 2009 18:58:43 +0000 http://topunderwatercamera.com/does-this-sound-good-for-a-novel.html#comment-161 Hey there! I know this is just an excerpt but who is "he" first and foremost. You lost me at the word go", so to speak. But I looooove the idea of this boy having strange powers now. This is Smallville in a way, I know, and that's okay. I want to see what else happens with this boy. Worry about grammar and punctuation later when you do your rewrite and just focus on getting your story out first. Nobody cares about grammar, sentence structure & punctuation if the story sucks, right? The story is what matters at the end of the day. Just look at Stephenie Meyer's writing for god's sake. It's the story that draws people first and foremost. Hey there! I know this is just an excerpt but who is “he” first and foremost. You lost me at the word go”, so to speak. But I looooove the idea of this boy having strange powers now. This is Smallville in a way, I know, and that’s okay. I want to see what else happens with this boy.
Worry about grammar and punctuation later when you do your rewrite and just focus on getting your story out first.

Nobody cares about grammar, sentence structure & punctuation if the story sucks, right? The story is what matters at the end of the day. Just look at Stephenie Meyer’s writing for god’s sake. It’s the story that draws people first and foremost.

]]> By: Fat Tay http://www.topunderwatercamera.com/does-this-sound-good-for-a-novel.html/comment-page-1#comment-160 Fat Tay Thu, 20 Aug 2009 02:40:54 +0000 http://topunderwatercamera.com/does-this-sound-good-for-a-novel.html#comment-160 If it becomes a movie, here's the theme song: Eel man, eel man Does whatever an eel can swims around, shoots a volt He's really slimy, and a dolt Look out! Here comes eel man! If it becomes a movie, here’s the theme song:

Eel man, eel man
Does whatever an eel can
swims around, shoots a volt
He’s really slimy, and a dolt
Look out! Here comes eel man!

]]> By: citsonga http://www.topunderwatercamera.com/does-this-sound-good-for-a-novel.html/comment-page-1#comment-159 citsonga Thu, 20 Aug 2009 00:45:06 +0000 http://topunderwatercamera.com/does-this-sound-good-for-a-novel.html#comment-159 something like spiderman huh. i don't think it's a very believable scenario. there are already a number of superheroes that have more potent powers than that. but that's just my opinion. i mean no offense to your idea. something like spiderman huh. i don’t think it’s a very believable scenario. there are already a number of superheroes that have more potent powers than that. but that’s just my opinion. i mean no offense to your idea.

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